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What is something you love and hate? I love and hate an app called dice quest? It is the best and the worst app ever invinted! You 'roll' dice and gain points that you can use to get rewards. Simple, right? The trick is you only get a certain number of 'free rolls' and then you have to pay for them. So you use your free rolls and then end up spending nindy-nine cents for extra rolls. It really adds up after a few hundred extra rolls. Have you ever heard of an app called 'Dice Quest'? Well let me tell you, it is one of the best and the worst apps ever invented! The way it works is you 'roll' dice and gain points. Then you trade in the points for rewards. Seems simple enough, right? Nope! The trick is that you only get a certain number of 'free rolls' and then you have to pay for them. But the game is so addictive you can't put it down! So you use up your free rolls and then end up spending 99 cents for extra rolls. It really adds up after a few hundred extra rolls. I ended up spending my entire allowance on one app! My first concert. So last weekend I went to the first concert I'd ever been to. It was a Tayler Swift concert. I had never heard of her before but my sister won tickets from the radio and she dragged me along. She was the fifth caller. So we went to the concert and the first thing I noticed was we had good seats. We were right by the stage! At the front! I can't remember much of the songs but I do remember 1 thing. The screaming! There was 20000 girls screaming through the entire thing! I don't know much about Taylor Swifts music but I do know her fans are crazy! They wouldn't stop yelling! Last weekend I got to do something I'd never done before... I got to go to a concert! You see my sister had won some front row tickets to see 'Taylor Swift' live. I had never heard of Taylor Swift before so my sister insisted I go. When we got the concert the first thing I noticed were our seats. We were right by the stage! Even though we were feet from Taylor, I can't remember any of the songs. But I do remember one thing. The screaming! There were 20,000 girls screaming nonstop through the entire performance! I still don't know much about Taylor Swift's music but I do know one thing... her fans are crazy! Remove redundant sentences. Tell me about your cell phone. My cellphone is amazing! Its an older model mytouch, but its still amazing. I got it for my birthday a year ago. I'd had never owned a cell phone before so it was an amazing experience for me. I bought a cover for it to keep it looking new and amazing. The best part is that it has the internet on it so I can surf the web while waiting for my bus or when I'm bored. Its like having a computer in my pocket. My cellphone is amazing! It's an older model MyTouch that I got it for my birthday a year ago. I'd never owned a cell phone before so it having one has been a new experience for me. For example now I have the internet with me no matter where I go. So I can surf the web while waiting for my bus or even when I'm bored. I know it may not seem like that big a deal to most people, but I'm still amazed that I have a computer in my pocket! Contractions What is a website you love? GameFAQs. GameFAQs is a website all about video games! You can find walkthroughs, pictures and cheat codes for games! There are also forums for the games. For every game ever made there is a forum where you can go to talk about the game. I don't know what I'd do without GameFAQs! A website I love is GameFAQs. If you haven't ever heard of it before, buckle up because here's a crash course! GameFAQs is a website all about video games! You can find walkthroughs, pictures and even cheat codes! But my favorite part are the forums! For every game ever made there is a forum where you can go to talk about the game. I spend hours just chatting with people about some of my favorites. I don't know what I'd do without GameFAQs! Remove redundancy. Elaborate on why it's so great. What I did on my snow day. On my snow day I slept in until noon. Then my brother and me went outside and had a snowball fight with our naybors. We won! Than all of us built a snowman together. After we finished that we went inside the house and got some food and played games. I had a great time on my snow day. First I got to sleep in until noon. Then after I got up, my brother and I went outside and had a snowball fight with our neighbors. And of course we won! Then all of us built a snowman together. After we finished building our snowman we went inside the house and got some hot food and played games until it was time to go to sleep. I almost wish everyday was a snow day! Final 'tie together' sentence, sequencing. What is your favorite cartoon? My favorite cartoon is called 'doug'. Its about a boy named doug. What I like best about doug is that it is so nice. A lot of other cartoons have characters who insult each other all the time, but in doug it is just about the daily problems of doug. But it is also very funny. If you haven't ever seen give it a watch. I'm sure you'll agree that it is an amazing show. My favorite cartoon is an old one that you may not have even heard of. It's called 'Doug' and it's all about the life of a boy named... you guessed it, Doug! What I like the most about the show is the types of jokes. A lot of other shows have characters who make jokes by insulting each other, but in 'Doug' its humor comes from the daily problems that he faces. If you haven't seen it before, give it a chance and I'm sure you'll agree that it is an amazing show! The worst haircut you ever received. let me tell you about the worst haircut I ever had. well first off all it happened after my brother bought a razor. my mom was at work and I was asleep. so naturally my brother felt this was the perfect time to test out his hair cutting skills. I remember waking up because I felt something on my face and surprise! it was a large clump of my hair! all on the ground around me I saw my hair! my brother was grounded for a week, but my punishment was much worse... I had to walk around bald! Let me tell you about the worst haircut I ever received. It happened shortly after my brother had bought himself a razor. My mom was at work and I was sleeping, so naturally my brother felt this was the perfect opportunity to test out his hair cutting skills. I remember waking up when I felt something fall on my face! Imagine my surprise when it turned out to be a large clump of my hair! In fact my hair was scattered all around me on the floor! While my brother was punished by being grounded, my punishment was much worse... I had to walk around bald! Why Spider-Man is the best hero. Spider-man is the best hero. He can swing from buildings. Spider-man also has a lot of enemies, like Rhino and Green Goblin. He also lives with his aunt may. His movie's were the best movies I have ever seen. They had action, comedy and even some romance. Spider-man is the best hero ever! Watch the movies and you will see why. If you ask me, the best hero around is Spider-Man. Buy why? Well his powers are amazing, he can swing from buildings, crawl on walls and he ever has super strength! If you want to see him in action you should check out his movies, they're some of the best I've seen. They were filled with action, comedy and even a bit of romance. Check them out and I'm sure you'll agree that Spider-Man is the best hero around. Crazy 80s fashion Today I was looking through some old family photos and I couldn't not believe what I seen! The clothes! Now I'm not normally one to criticise a persons clothes, but every one was wearing hot pink! And there pants were on backwards? And thats not even the worse part. All the girl's had weird outter socks that went halfway up there legs. It does make me wonder though, will people laugh at what we are wearing today? Today I was looking through some old family photos and I couldn't believe what I saw! The clothes! Now I'm not normally one to criticize a person's clothing, but everyone was wearing hot pink! And their pants were on backwards? What were they thinking?!? And that's not even the worst part. All the girls had weird outer socks that went halfway up their legs. What was the point? While it's funny to see those old pictures, it does make me wonder... will people laugh at what we're wearing today? How was your first field trip? What did you see and do? My first field trip was to the science museum. It was in 3rd grade. First I learned about the planets. Second I learned about electricity. Third I went to the human body area and learned about muscles, bones and skeletons. The musuem was an amazing field trip! My first field trip was to The Science Museum. While we were only in 3rd grade I still remember it like it was yesterday. The first thing I did when I got there was check out the exhibits about the planets. Next I went to the electricity exhibit and learned about how electricity worked. Then I went to the human body area and learned all about muscles and bones. It was an amazing time and I can't wait to go back again. If you could make one thing illegal what would it be? Using cell phones in theaters! I hate it! It is so annoying! I will be sitting their watching the movie and then out I see a bright light! It is so distracting! It completely ruins the movie for me! If I could make one thing illegal it would definitely be using a cell phone in a movie theater. It is very distracting and even more annoying! I'll be sitting in a dark theater engrossed in the movie and then someone will open their phone, illuminating the room. So now instead of watching the movie, I'm watching someones overly bright screen! It completely ruins the movie and if I could I'd make cell phones in cinemas illegal. Reitterate prompt, use fewer exclamation points. What is your favorite video game? My favorite game of all time is PokÃ©mon. Mario is also a fun game. PokÃ©mon is about catching little monsters and fighting them and exploring. There are hundreds of monsters to collect. I can play it for hours. Itâ€™s the best game ever! While Iâ€™ve played hundreds of video games, my favorite is easily PokÃ©mon. If youâ€™re not familiar with PokÃ©mon, let me explain a little about it. PokÃ©mon is a game about exploring and collecting little monsters called PokÃ©mon. You then use the pokÃ©mon to battle other trainers, collect badges and discover new areas. But by far the best part about the game is that there are literally hundreds of PokÃ©mon to collect, so you can play for hours and hours! Give the game a shot and Iâ€™m sure in no time youâ€™ll agree with me that itâ€™s the best game ever! Omitting unnecessary info, clarifying statements Why Luigi is better than Mario So when most people think about great game characters they think of one person. Mario. But I personally prefer his brother, Luigi. But why? Well Luigi can do everything Mario can do, but better! He can jump higher, run faster and heâ€™s taller. Plus his green colors are much cooler looking than Marioâ€™s red. So while you may think Marioâ€™s a great character, give his brother a try and youâ€™ll agree, Luigi is number one. When most people think about great game characters they usually think of one person. Mario. And while Mario is great, I personally prefer his brother, Luigi. But what make Luigi better than Mario? Well he can do everything Mario can do, but he can do it better. Luigi can jump higher, run faster and heâ€™s even taller. Not to mention his green shirt is much cooler looking than Marioâ€™s red. So the next time someone ask you to think about a great game character, donâ€™t forget Marioâ€™s brother, the true number one. If you could have any job, what would it be and why? Iâ€™d want to be a basketball player. Firstly of all they make millions of dollars for only playing 10 games a year or so. Secondly they also get all kinds of free stuff from companies like shoes and cereal and whatnot. And thirdly they have a job where they get to run around and have fun. What a great thing getting paid to play around! If I could have any job, Iâ€™d want to be a basketball player. The first reason is the amount of money they make. Not hundreds, not thousands, but millions and millions of dollars a year! The second reason is the other perks they get. From free shoes to free cereal anything they endorse they get for free! And my last reason is the job itself. How many jobs do you get paid to run around with your friends playing a game? Being a basketball player would be the best and most fun job in the world. What is your favorite subject and why? My favorite subject is math. Math? Yep, math. While I no some people donâ€™t like it for me its like solving a puzzle. Your given a couple of the puzzle pieces and then you have to put them together in the right order to find the answer. Sure its hard sometimes, but that feeling when you solve a difficult problem is just so awesome! My favorite subject is math. Yep, math. While I know some people donâ€™t like it, for me each problem is like solving a little puzzle. First youâ€™re given the puzzle pieces, then you have figure out where they go and finally you put them together in the right order to find the answer. And sure, itâ€™s hard sometimes, but the feeling you get when you solve a difficult problem is like nothing else. Math is definitely my favorite subject. What skill are you the best at? The skill Iâ€™m most good at is knot tying. I donâ€™t mean like little shoelace knots either, though I am pretty good at those too, I mean big giant knots one time my brother asked me to tie him up with one of my knots cause he thought he could get out but after 30 minutes of trying he couldnâ€™t even loosen it I think that definetly means my knot trying skills are the best around. The skill Iâ€™m best at is tying knots. I donâ€™t mean little shoelace knots though (but I am pretty good at those too). Iâ€™m talking about big giant knots. One time I tied a knot so good that my brother couldnâ€™t get out of it for over 30 minutes! He couldnâ€™t even loosen it an inch. While I donâ€™t have any boy scout badges, I think my brother would definitely agree Iâ€™m the best knot tier around. Mr. Wiskersâ€™ kittens Youâ€™ll never believe what happened to me last night. It all started about a month ago. I noticed my cat, Mr. Wiskers was getting kinda pudgy. I tried feeding him less but he would just make all kinds of meows! Well last night I noticed Mr. Wiskers had a couple strange furry things around him. When I picked one up it turn out to be a Kitten! Can you believe it? It turns out Mr. Wiskers was actually Mrs. Wiskers all along! You wonâ€™t believe what I learned last night! Actually, let me start from the beginning. About a month ago I noticed my cat, Mr. Wiskers, was getting kinda pudgy. To help him lose some weight I cut back on the food I was giving him, but as soon as I did, heâ€™d just meow nonstop. Well, last night I noticed Mr. Wiskers had some strange furry things around him. Imagine my surprise when I picked one up and discovered a newborn kitten! It turns out Mr. Wiskers wasnâ€™t a Mister at all! I guess I should have named him, Mrs. Wiskers, Huh? Name one object you own that you couldnâ€™t live without and why. The one thing I couldnâ€™t live without is my phone. I know it sounds silly, but anytime I donâ€™t have my phone I just feel super crazy weird! I do not just use it to make calls though, I also use it to play games when Iâ€™m bored or check my friends status on facebook I use it for everything. I do not know what Iâ€™d do without my phone! The one object I own that I couldnâ€™t live without is my cell phone. I know it seems silly, but already whenever I leave home without it, I just feel weird! But I wouldnâ€™t just be missing phone calls, you see my phone is also used for gaming, for checking my friends facebook statuses and for hundreds of other things. If I didnâ€™t have my phone I donâ€™t know what Iâ€™d do! If you could have one object from a video game, what would it be and why? I would choose the propeller suit from my favorite game, Super Mario Wii. This is basically a suit that lets you fly in the air! Like a mini helicopter. Iâ€™d choose this cause I could fly anywhere I wanted to go. I wouldnâ€™t have to have anyone give me a ride or ride in my brothers smelly car. Having the proppeler suit would be a life saver! If I could have any object from a game Iâ€™d choose the propeller suit from my favorite game, Super Mario Wii. This item is a suit you wear that lets you act like a little mini helicopter, flying high up into the air. This power would be great because I could fly anywhere I wanted to go. No more waiting for someone to give me a ride or having to sit in the back of my brothers smelly car. Having the propeller suit would make life so much easier, what a life saver! Would you rather live in the Sahara Desert or in Antarctica? Antarctica. If I lived in the dessert it would be waaaay to hot! I already sweat buckets in the summer, so living in the sahara would be like torture! Plus the dessert has all kinds of creepy crawly things. From scorpions to lizards to even tarantulas! YUCK! Give me nice cool antarctica anyday! I would rather live in Antarctica. While it would be cold, the desert would be worse since itâ€™s way too hot. While I donâ€™t mind heat too much, I already sweat buckets in the summer, so living in the middle of a desert would be like torture! Not to mention the desert is home to all kinds of creepy crawly thing. From scorpions to lizards to ugly, hairy tarantulas. Yuck! Give me nice, cool Antarctica any day of the week.

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